I see nothing wrong with your log! As a cache owner, I enjoy reading about the cachers experience when they search for my hides.
On a personal note, when is first got into this hobby, a "seasoned" geocacher complained about my logs - they were either too short, too long, or not specific enough. I got so paranoid about my logs that I nearly quit. Then my husband (who doesn't cache) asked me why I cared what this stalker cacher said and I realized that I didn't care. So I ignored him and years later I still enjoy geocaching.
So write what you want!